Hit Me Up With Comments....What do You Think About My Personal Narrative?

Ok, after much deliberation, here is my rough draft of the blog I am supposed to write about myself.....what do you think? This will be read by all my fellow students and professors when I attend my fellowship in two weeks. Should I send it as is or add or subtract anything. I need some feedback before I submit it! Its due now so please hit me up today! I am not sure this totally represents the "essence" of who I am but tell me what ya think:

Seven Sentence Blog About Myself:

"Fierce Diva is a hard working, self-directed individual who has been working in education for over twenty years. Diva is very dedicated to her students and likes to utilize new technology such as blogging and multimedia in the classroom. She is a former DJ who loves to travel and learn about various human rights issues; particularly the Civil Rights Movement. Diva's major goals are to one day become a philanthropist and create life changing experiences for people. She believes in the motto "Dream Big" and hopes to someday make a film or spin records in Ibiza.

Peace,
Diva