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Thursday, June 19, 2008

Hit Me Up With Comments....What do You Think About My Personal Narrative?

Ok, after much deliberation, here is my rough draft of the blog I am supposed to write about myself.....what do you think? This will be read by all my fellow students and professors when I attend my fellowship in two weeks. Should I send it as is or add or subtract anything. I need some feedback before I submit it! Its due now so please hit me up today! I am not sure this totally represents the "essence" of who I am but tell me what ya think:

Seven Sentence Blog About Myself:
"Fierce Diva is a hard working, self-directed individual who has been working in education for over twenty years. Diva is very dedicated to her students and likes to utilize new technology such as blogging and multimedia in the classroom. She is a former DJ who loves to travel and learn about various human rights issues; particularly the Civil Rights Movement. Diva's major goals are to one day become a philanthropist and create life changing experiences for people. She believes in the motto "Dream Big" and hopes to someday make a film or spin records in Ibiza.

Peace,
Diva

8 comments:

Chris said...

Hi Diva,

It looks good to me, but I don't know enough about its purpose to really be able to make any helpful comment.

It's always difficult to write these kind of "personal statements" - like seeing yourself from an outsider's perspective and picking out, as you say, the "essence" of yourself.

But I didn't want to ignore your request ... you've been so helpful to me.

Best...

Chris x

MamaFlo said...

Very interestingly put but good. You are good Diva, you know that right?

Mz Diva said...

Maybe I should add that I plan to be a philanthropist by obtaining donations from others (since I have no money of my ownthat is the only way that dream can materialize!) Besdies, I am so much better at spending other people's money than mine why ruin a good thing?
Peace,
Diva

maggie's mind said...

I *love* the statement and what it says about you! I did notice the semicolon where I think you meant to put a comma before sending, but that's the English major in me... I do love the description, and I think the last sentence is fun!

Mz Diva said...

Thanks for the feedback all. I am going to make a couple changes and submit it tomorrow. Maggie, I did feel the need to throw in some fun since I will be in a very "academica" type of enviornment and I do have other goals in life besides academic ones. Ignore my spelling and grammar this week....Its the last week of school so I am too tired to bother with editing my writing. Lets just pretend I don't teach English this week, K?
Peace,
Diva

Brandie said...

Ack! I came a day too late to make any suggestions. Actually, I don't have any, I really like it. It's much better than I could have done for myself.

CONGRATULATIONS on your 222/211 anniversary! I'm very interested to hear your number 11 stories, even if I have no significant number stories myself. Well... my older daughter was born on 11/22/2000 .... does that count?

MamaFlo said...

Diva, I had someone design my blog, she is the same person that ultimately did Maggie's blog. The link is on the bottom right side bar of my blog - Doodlebug Designs. She was easy to work with and very reasonable in price - I gave it to myself when I was smoke free 6 months (I think it was).
There is a link on my blog to email me directly and then we can chat easier about your blog.......I'm glad you're going to be able to relax some this summer.

lynda w said...

I can't seem to keep up with anything lately. :-) Sorry I'm late getting here, but it sounds great, Diva!